Thursday, November 29, 2012

Flash Fiction Friday 11-30-12

Hi Everyone!
I know I've been out of the loop for quite some time. Missing in action. I have lots of excuse for my absence but as they say, no good reasons. I've missed you all thoroughly.
So pass the paddle, offer me up a good round of disicplinary action and let's get this show on the road.
For those not in the know, Flash Fiction Friday is brought to you by those wild and crazy (but loveable) characters of Will Blog For Sex,  a writing group that meets on Facebook. Each week a photo is presented to spark our imaginations. We are allowed 100 words, no more and no less to tell a story, create a dialogue and capture interest. This week the picture got to me in a different way and I had to share what I saw. Thank you for your patience.
I know this face, this look.
The battle scarred and war weary recognize one of our own.
On the surface, an angry hunger, a desperate desire for change. Naked pain exposed.

“Why me?“
“When will it end?”
“If only…”
“Who cares.“

Hurt, mistrust, exhaustion. Loneliness that feels bigger than a mortal body can hold, surrounding an emptiness nothing can fill.
And fear. Paralyzing. Unable to move forward. Too late to go back. Stuck on the side of the cliff with the tide coming in and no help from above. Rescue won't come.
I know this face. I know Depression, intimately.

Thank you, again for walking down my path a brief while. I'd love to hear what you think, so leave me a comment. And be sure to check out my partners in crime at the links below. See you soon.

J S Morbius:
Naomi Shaw:


  1. Excellent return. Chilling words, desperate. I hope somene comes to help. Great flash :)

  2. Oh, how I've missed you, JP. I sank into your 100. Lots of powerful emotion in your words. I know this face<-- wow. Beautiful flash.

  3. Brilliant flash JP. Very powerful but also deeply thought provoking

  4. *Sighs* Ah, the look of depression. I think some form of depression has touched all of us at one time or another, but it's such a lonely feeling. It hurts to talk about it and it hurts even more to keep it locked up inside. An excellent use of your 100 words JP, well done, well done indeed.

    1. Thank you Ben. And everyone. Yes. I suffer from depression. Sometimes it can be overwhelming. When I saw the pic I felt I had to talk about it.

  5. Great to have you back JP and that's a beautiful piece of writing, tense and emotive.

  6. Welcome back! :) Your flash was deep, powerful, so close to home. You worded depression so perfectly on how it draws you into its depths and makes you feel your on edge and no where to go, whether it be up or down, or forward or backwards. You literally feel trapped within it. Though we can escape, once we find that little opening and that crevice in the rock to lift us up to the top and to freedom. :) Great flash.